I thought it was a very good essay with very strong points. Really the only things that I thought were a little weak were the transitions from paragraph to paragraph (and I feel like a hypocrite saying that because I know my transitions probably aren't good), and i think the conclusion could have been a little stronger. But other than that I though it was very good.
I thought it was a very good essay with very strong points. Really the only things that I thought were a little weak were the transitions from paragraph to paragraph (and I feel like a hypocrite saying that because I know my transitions probably aren't good), and i think the conclusion could have been a little stronger. But other than that I though it was very good.
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ReplyDelete-maybe discuss the MLIA quote instead of just throwing it in there
-I agree with Jesse that the transitions are not smooth
-I really like your ideas about symbols in writing (paragraph 6)
-You were right, you do have 2 conclusions. The second is unnecessary because all it does is summarize the points you made previously